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8 Ways to Write a Stronger College Admissions Essay

The college essay can be a source of stress among high school seniors applying to their schools of choice. An SCSU administrator who oversees admissions shares ways to write a winning essay.

 

January and February can be a stressful time if you’re a high school senior.

The glorious days of fall – when the promise of one’s future is close enough to be exhilarating, but not so close as to be anxiety-inducing – are over. Yet, the inevitable thaw of spring, when  college plans are finalized and “senioritis” can set in, is still a few months away. Instead, the cold, hard realities of weather and life coincide — prompting students to choose from among the colleges to which they would like to apply.

And while filling out forms can be both tedious and time consuming, the oft-dreaded essay is often the biggest source of stress for students when applying to schools. After all, except for the interview that some schools require, the essay is the last opportunity to stand out from the crowd — to show the admissions offices that you are a thoughtful student with good writing skills and are worthy of acceptance.

Kimberly Crone, associate vice president for academic student services at Southern, has plenty of suggestions on how to write the application essay. Her experience includes dealing with various aspects of the admissions process, including how to write an attention-grabbing essay. Here are some tips she offers:

  • Respond to the topic. You can be the best writer in the world, but if you don’t address the main point or question of the essay, it may not matter. Creativity is encouraged, but don’t stray too far from the topic.
  • Highlight your distinctiveness. Colleges often look for individuals who bring something unusual (in a good way) to the school. If there is an opportunity to talk about your accomplishments, activities or interests, try to include something that sets you apart from most other students.
  • Remember your audience. It’s a good idea to do a little research about the school in terms of its location, values and mission, as well as its academic and athletic offerings. If there is an opportunity to link what you do to what they offer or value, that’s a plus.
  • Mind your grammar, words and humor. Properly delivered, a good sense of humor can be an effective communication device. But a joke or humorous anecdote may not come across the same way in writing as it does verbally. Remember, you can’t use inflection, pitch or other speaking devices in an essay and that can change the context. Also, if you do attempt to use humor, be sure that the comment is tasteful.
  • Write in your own voice. Don’t try to be someone you’re not, or write in a way that is so bland that your voice ceases to come through.
  • Follow the instructions. This applies to the parameters of the essay – length, format, etc. If the application asks for 800 words, don’t submit an essay of 2,500 words. It not only risks putting the readers to sleep, but it calls into question both your ability to comply with basic rules and to outline your thoughts concisely and coherently.
  • Proofread. Everyone makes mistakes in their initial drafts. Even Thomas Jefferson made revisions to his copy when writing the Declaration of Independence. Some readers are less forgiving of typos and other careless errors. You might get away with one or two minor errors, but a pattern of mistakes indicates sloppy work. Most schools don’t want students who don’t pay attention to essential details.
  • Get feedback. Your essay should reflect your own thoughts, in your own voice. But that doesn’t mean you can’t share your drafts with others to get their suggestions on how to improve them. Accept those suggestions that you think make sense and discard those that you don’t like.

For those who have read college admission essays – administrators, teachers, parents – what advice would you offer students?

Sam Mihailoff March 7, 2013 at 05:17 am
Steven, I am sorry that you obviously have had some bad experiences with teachers ...bullies??? hardly so, although I too remember a few beauts (sarcasm) along my way also!!! By in large, I still have very POSITIVE memories of most of them. Anybody can force-feed the info for these "tests"...but true teaching is an art! It is time to scrap the governmental imposed testing and allow these artists to sculpt the minds of the children
Newtown Resident and Teacher March 7, 2013 at 11:45 am
Teachers DO teach how to respond to a topic, remember your audience, use proper conventions of writing (and proofread, and get feedback), use your own voice (this is taught less frequently, but still taught), and of course, to follow the instructions. These are simply good writing skills.
While Kim is correct in saying that students don't get a lot of opportunities to practice college essays, to imply that teachers aren't teaching basic writing skills is ridiculous. For anyone to believe that is disheartening. And it's unfortunate that apparently some people view teachers, as a group of professionals, as bullies.
Steven DeVaux March 7, 2013 at 12:19 pm
True to form, teachers blame the student. Why aren't they creating authentic assessments (college essays) providing more opportunities and effectively like multitasking "multi-teaching"?
And to do blame transference to "some people" is disingenuous. The fact is not all teachers are bullies but as hidden cameras have shown, teachers yell, snap, shun, get sarcastic and other bullying behavior. The shield of "they're just human" is raised but the damage is already done. Their trick is to claim their classroom is off limits unless pre-arranged and staged clearly shows when hidden cameras reveal a day-to-day pattern compared to the vist day. Some people do have the option to select private schools and more and more parents are selecting that option when the have explored classroom behavior with their child. As professionals, they should police themselves. Instead, they form a wall and refuse to acknowledge a pervasive issue. In the end, it the children that lose.
Steven DeVaux March 7, 2013 at 12:22 pm
Sam,
I disagree. Teachers are there to teach the nuts and bolts. A child's parent has the authority and responsibility to sculpt the child in a healthy and positve way. Scars on a child's pysche is a scar for life and - the younger the child the deeper the scar goes in emotional development when the teacher has a "bad day" or "is only human". Apologists for it then turn it around to be anyone's fault but the teachers.
Newtown Resident and Teacher March 7, 2013 at 12:50 pm
Steven, it is clear that you don't spend much time in our schools. You ask "why aren't [teachers] creating authentic assessments?" as though we're not. That's a huge assumption on your part. Additionally, I'm not sure that language arts teachers would consider a college essay to be a great assessment tool. I'm not sure what you mean when you ask about multi-tasking and "multi-teaching."
The fact of the matter is that not all people are bullies, but some are. In every profession. A private school teacher is no less likely to be a bully than a public school teacher. I can't imagine what school you attended where the teachers behaved so terribly. In my experience (in multiple districts), teachers take their job seriously and are horrified when another teacher tarnishes the profession. Your statements are so broad and sweeping as to discredit an entire profession of people. I work with colleagues who have marched straight to administration because they had a suspicion about another teacher (which turned out to be true, and resulted in the teacher losing his job).
Of course teachers should be able to teach students how to write college admissions essay. It would be wonderful to have more skilled writing teachers inside of the schools, but that is not the case. That said, giving tips to do a better job on an essay to help gain admission to college won't hurt anyone; it might help students write better. I don't disagree that schools should do many more things than they do. But let's not beat up teachers. Most of them work hard, are organized but also must adhere to rather strict curriculum guidelines set up by individual states to meet state and federal requirements. Let's not shoot the messenger - the teacher.
Newtown resident and teacher, I did not mean to imply that teachers do not teach basic writing skills. I don't think I said that, and I am sorry if that is how you interpreted it. I like teachers, and I think teachers have too much on their plates to do everything. Read my last post.... I said Steven should not shoot the messenger, the teacher. You sound like you will be one fabulous writing teacher. That is comforting. My daughter's high school LSA teacher is phenomenal - and she is learning how to write quite well.
Richard Poulton March 7, 2013 at 01:30 pm
Going to jump in here with a quick comment as to students, learning, teachers, etc..
One, I have been out of school OH so very long(1965) so I don't pretent to have a grasp on today's issues but I can say this with authority. During the 90's and most likey happening even today, the majority of police academy recruits in NH spent the first few weeks just doing remedial skills like sentence structure and writing. These are HS graduates who couldn't put a sentence togther that made any since. Now this wasn't every class member but enough that this was required. So who is the problem, the teacher, the student or the parental up-bringing?
Laura March 7, 2013 at 01:43 pm
It takes a village...
Newtown Resident and Teacher March 7, 2013 at 02:18 pm
Kim, I was responding more to Steven's question of whether teachers "teach that." I was pointing out that most of the things listed in the article to craft a good college essay are simply good writing skills that are taught all the time. I'm sorry that you think it is not the case that there are many skilled writing teachers. I also want to clarify that I said the college essay is not necessarily a good assessment tool. I did NOT say that students shouldn't have an opportunity to practice it. However, you write a college essay one time in your life, and there are many different writing activities, projects, etc. that facilitate not only good writing, but also writing meaningfully and reflectively about oneself, which would transfer to a college essay.
Donald Borsch Jr. March 7, 2013 at 02:43 pm
It takes parents...
Newtown Resident and Teacher - I would love to talk to you more. You can reach me at kim@wowwritingworkshop.com or at 800-497-WRITE. You sound like a great writing teacher.
I also want to say I have been keeping all of the Newtown residents in my heart and prayers. I don't know how I got to this thread - must have been the blog. I realize I have been communicating with people who live in the community where the tragic shooting took so many innocent lives. May you each find strength to move forward. Please accept my condolences. I am going to be done with my comments on writing and focus on healing thoughts.
Laura March 7, 2013 at 03:18 pm
It takes a lot of people - the kids have to understand they have a part in this as well as having active parents and concerned educators. Our technology age has made for lazier learning. Hand writing is no longer a required skill; using a slide rule? out of the question and our answers are instant...I taught my son to investigate the answer(s) and problem solve...Now it's a 'hurry-up' world. We most likely will never have to leave home to work...Teachers still have heart and play such a big part in our children's lifes. Parents HAVE TO be there!
Donald Borsch Jr. March 7, 2013 at 03:41 pm
"..I taught my son to investigate the answer(s) and problem solve..."
Exactly. You're his mother. You are his first, and best, teacher. You are available 24 hours a day, 7 days a week, 365 days a year. You have no limitations, no regulations, no mandates or quotas to meet. You have a vested interest in your son's education, and that starts at home. As I said, it takes parents, not a village. :)
Wondering March 7, 2013 at 04:09 pm
So volunteers who coach don't matter? What about the police and firemen who protect us providing a great example of selflessness? They don't matter? And of course teachers (unless you think that all children should be home schooled). Don't they help? And for parents down on their luck, don't the volunteers at the Food Panty (and those that donate food) help bring up our children? While parents clearly have the primary responsibility for raising their children, we all play a role. It really does take a village.
Donald Borsch Jr. March 7, 2013 at 04:20 pm
Wondering,
So you are expecting and hoping these other people will raise your children? Pray tell, what can you offer to my children that they cannot get from me? What can these people teach my children they cannot learn from me? It takes parents. The 'village aspect' is complementary, but not crucial.
Laura March 7, 2013 at 04:39 pm
To make a well-rounded, confident, caring and an understanding person - it does take a village. A parent can't teach everything...they are first line...but the others are needed for proper guidance and learning...hence a Village...
Donald Borsch Jr. March 7, 2013 at 04:49 pm
Laura,
Sounds like collectivism to me. I reckon we will simply have to agree to disagree. No worries, though. It happens. :)
Sean M March 7, 2013 at 05:12 pm
We do not need a village. We need moms and dads together in the home taking responsibility for their children. We need to shrink the size and scope of government so they can stop taxing families into needing two incomes.
We need to end liberal policies that break up the family, keep people on generational welfare, and continue the cycle of poverty with useless government run schools that have union bosses making sure they get teacher's dues instead of focusing on education. Children need to be exposed to a number of role models. My most lasting influence was a high school teacher who cared enough about me, a stupid teenager with his head in the wrong place. What we need to end is the notion that we are not responsible for our own needs. We are responsible for our economic well being, not the government, not our employers. We are responsible for our own protection. We are responsible for raising our kids, not the government. The rugged individualism that caused our Founders to tell the British to go to hell is lacking so much today.
Sean M March 7, 2013 at 05:17 pm
Most teachers have their hearts in the right place. The problem is Washington sticking its nose in a local issue, the elected officials who take the money with the strings attached, and the people for allowing this to continue.
Americans are so poorly informed on what is going on, it is pathetic. Government schools teach kids to be mediocre. Kids come out of school with little work ethic and lack the ability to think critically. I think back to book reports. Kids are expected to regurgitate what they read, not think critically about what they read. There is a reason why so many millionaires are drop outs. The skills needed to be successful in school are not in line with the skills needed to be successful in the real world of free markets. Government schools dumb down the brightest kids. The one size fits all does not work. There is no fixing the disaster that is government run schools. Let parents who want to be engaged to take their money elsewhere. Those kids can be saved.
Donald Borsch Jr. March 7, 2013 at 05:18 pm
Thank you, Sean Murphy. Nicely said, sir.
Laura March 7, 2013 at 05:33 pm
When did I say 'government' in any of my dialogue? I said parents, teachers, there are other role models out there...the people in Washington are useless at this time! AND I said the children are responsibile for themselves as well...you all would dispute if the sky was blue...there is a teachable moment every day from everyone...
Wondering March 7, 2013 at 05:55 pm
Donald, I don't hope that people will be involved in the community. I expect it. I expect that people, rather than being holed up in their home, will get out and be involved. They will volunteer to coach our children. They will volunteer at the library. They will volunteer in our houses of prayer. They will volunteer with the Boy Scouts and Girl Scouts. They will attend town meetings.
To quote myself (because I think you might have missed it the first time), "While parents clearly have the primary responsibility for raising their children, we all play a role." A role. Not primary but clearly a role if we want our children to grow-up in a society in which they feel a part of.
Donald Borsch Jr. March 7, 2013 at 06:08 pm
Wondering,
And I expect you, and everyone else, to allow me to raise my children as I see fit, as I will easily allow you to do. I am their teacher, pastor/shepherd, protector, social coordinator, confidence-builder, character-builder, provider, chef, and faithful father. My position as their father trumps your expectations for them to be a part of a happy, shiny community. When the time comes, and it will, I will be releasing my children into the community to make it better, not the other way around. Cheers.
Bailey Ave March 7, 2013 at 06:13 pm
"So volunteers who coach don't matter? "
Ha! I've seen some coaches make incredibly bad decisions when it comes to the kids in their charge. The last person I would want to influence my children is a coach. Separately, when parents say it takes a village, I think sometimes they use it as an excuse. Parents think they don't have to do their part because after all, the responsibility lies with everyone.... not. I think the parents are just too lazy to help their own children with their homework, so they pass off that responsibility to the teachers. And when the kid fails, well, it's the teacher's fault. I don't know how parents these days live with the guilt of screwing up their own kids. I guess that's the real superpower of toaday's parents. They are selfish and feel no guilt.
jim laguardia March 7, 2013 at 06:27 pm
Back on topic... would a good tip be not to use the # and to spell it out?? As in "eight"
Bailey Ave March 7, 2013 at 08:30 pm
I've always thought that to be true, if a number is less than 10, spell it out. 10 or greater, use the numerical form.
Wondering March 7, 2013 at 08:45 pm
What percentage of all is some? Of course nobody is perfect. But the more of us that get out and work with the community, the more of a community we will be.
Bailey Ave March 7, 2013 at 09:01 pm
I think it depends on the reasons a person volunteers. In some cases I don't think it's really for the students or the community at large. I think some people do it for power and glory. I think there are quite a few obvious examples of that kind of land grab in this town.

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